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February 06, 2007

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Shyla

I luuurrrvvveee water. I agree there should positively, absoulutely be a water fountain outside your school. Because if there was a water fountain outside my school I'm sure evryone would be happy with it. And it's probably the same way there. Anyways. I hope you get your water fountain. Keep Blogging!

xxx,
Shyla

Lani

Hi Anni,

I really like your opening paragraph, especially the phrase "this really caught my attention because".

I can't wait to read your other reasons!!

I know you aren't finished and perhaps planned to proof when you do, but wondered if you missed some capitals on the beginnings of some sentences?

Best,
Lani

Virtuous


Anni,

After reading your post, I found myself wondering why a lot of schools do not have water fountains. Even though you made a compelling argument for water fountains, and I agree with the convenience of a water fountain on the playground; many administrators and custodians fear the many consequences for the putting a water fountain on the playground. Many custodians vision an area on the playground that will not be sanitary after a while. Students will begin to spit in the water fountains and play with the water outside. Eventually, custodians fear vandalism of the water fountain and abuse of it. I know many schools have water fountains and do not face these issues, but how do you think other schools should approach these potential problems before installing a water fountain?
Virtuous

Miss Kay

I admired how you were able to clearly state the reasons why your school should have a water fountain on the play ground. You seem quite passionate about this issue. So my questions to you are: What are the steps that you can take to bring this proposal to your administrators? Would you request support from your teachers and classmates?

Michael

Hi Anni,

You have constructed a fantastic persuasive argument for waterfoutains on school playgrounds.

I like how you considered three major reasons and constructed each reason into its own paragraph.

I also enjoy how you engaged your readers.

Keep on writing!

Michael

Cordelia

Anni,
What a fabulous idea! I had never even thought about having a water fountain right there on the playground. That would solve so many problems. You stated your reasons in a very organized and persuasive way. (Persuasive means you are trying to get someone else to agree with you.) It is obvious you had thought this out before posting.

I can remember so well being in elementary school and coming in from the playground absolutely parched. Then, I had to wait with the rest of the class in line at the water fountain inside of the building. Does your class do what mine always did? "Hey, hurry up...you're taking way too long...all of the cold water is going to be gone!" That's right. We would argue, plead, and basically make noise which was not appreciated by the classes on the same hallway as the water fountain.

So, you could add to your very good points about thirst and good health that an outside water fountain would also eliminate (get rid of) hallway misbehavior.

Has your principal read your opinion on a playground water fountain? Do you think he/she would agree? Have you thought about making an appointment with the principal and presenting your persuasive speech? Think about it. Students often bring about the best changes. If you don't, who will?

anni

Dear Shyla,
I hope i get the water foughtian but I'm not sure that i am going to get it because m y principal has not sad anything about it ,but i do hope that we get it .

Byeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee,
Anni

anni

Dear Lani,
I will proofread and look for capital letters.
Thanks You,
anni

Anni

Dear Michael,
Thank you it took me a while to think about the three reasons.I will do my best to keep on doing what I do.
Loveeeeee,
Anni

Donna

Anni,
In Queensland, Australia where I teach and went to school, water fountains(bubblers) are an essential! Each school has rows of bubblers outside for student use. It gets so hot here and much of our time is spent outdoors that i needed to be reminded by your entry that not all schools have the same needs. Children are strongly encouraged to drink water often at school (in and out of the classroom).
I taught in Canada for a year in 1999 and was really surprised by how little water people consumed there in a day. Of course the difference in climate impacts on this.
Congratulations on your foresight in regards to this issue. If you require some more good reasons for installing a water fountain you might add that adequate water consumption is required for optimal brain function!
Good luck and keep drinking!
Donna

anni

Dear Donna,
I will keep drinking !!!! If you could go back to canada do you think you wuold????
ANNI

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