Alejandro's Cave of Mystery

Improving My Style

Have you read the story about Extra! Tips & Tips! Did you like the introduction? If you did I am here to make it to the extreme. Here is my introduction.

Hey! Would you like to transform your writing into a masterpiece? Do you want to have interesting facts and fascinating subjects. You need to have some tips from Alejandro. Tip number one, try to include vivid words. Vivid words are better  when they are adjectives and exclamations. An exclamation is a word that expresses feelings such as Wow!

Now here is my new and improved introduction. Hey! Would you like to evolve your narrative into a paradise for readers? Do you want to have absorbing facts and have influencing issues? You need to have some tips from the master of all writing laws and stories, Alejandro. Tip number one, try to include vivid words that will catch a lazy man's attention. These words stand out like the Empire State Building. It is better if they are astonishing adjectives and powerful exclamation words such as WOW!!!!!!!!!!

Assignment Organization

We had an assignment to do on the six traits of effective writing and I chose an article from Time For Kids and I put this article on the trait of organization.

Howling winds roared at 100 miles per hour, drowning trees and damaging beachfront homes. Heavy rains fell across hundreds of miles of land. More than 4.5 million people lost power and over 1,500 airline flights were canceled. Hurricane Isabel stormed its way ashore on Thursday, moving into North Carolina and pushing its way up the East Coast.

The huge storm was blamed for at least 17 deaths: nine in Virginia, three in North Carolina, two in Maryland and one each in Pennsylvania, New Jersey and Rhode Island.

Eye on Isabel
Hurricanes in the Northern Hemisphere rotate in a counter-clockwise (west to east) direction around what is called an eye. Isabel's eye pushed ashore Thursday afternoon along the southern Outer Banks, according to the National Hurricane Center.

Like most hurricanes, Isabel weakened as it moved further across land. That's because hurricanes gain strength from the heat and energy found in warm ocean waters. By Friday, Isabel turned into a tropical depression as it traveled toward Canada.

Hurricanes are classified into five categories, based on their wind speeds and potential to cause damage. Weather forecasters called Isabel a Category 2, which has winds of 96-110 miles per hour. Earlier in the week, out in the Atlantic Ocean, Isabel had been a Category 3, with winds clocked at up to 125 miles per hour.

Hurricane preparations had been in the works for a few days. In the nation's capitol, federal government offices were shut down Thursday. The governors of North Carolina, Virginia, Maryland and Delaware and the mayor of Washington D.C. all declared a state of emergency.

The Good News
Despite its strong winds, Isabel did not do as much damage as weather forecasters had predicted. It did manage to dump as much as 4 inches of rain in Pennsylvania before moving toward Ohio, and Canada.

National Hurricane Center Director Max Mayfield said Isabel posed a threat because ot its size, roughly equal to that of Colorado. "This hurricane will not be remembered for how strong it is," Mayfield said. "It will be remembered for how large it is."

Did you find organization in this article? Well if you didn't, I will tell you why I chose this topic. I chose it because the way that it began and the way the story was ordered. Do you get what organization is? If you don't, organization is when you have your narrative or subject in order just fine.

Extra! Tips & Tips

       Hey! Would you like to transform your writing into a masterpiece? Do you want to have interesting facts and fascinating subjects. You need to have some tips from Alejandro. Tip number one, try to include vivid words. Vivid words are better  when they are adjectives and exclamations. An exclamation is a word that expresses feelings such as Wow! Tip number two, try to use dialog more often if it has more than one character. Do you know what dialog is? Well if you don't, here is an example. "Hello, how are you doing?" said Jonathan there is my example. Now do you know what dialog is? Tip number three, try to make it as long and interesting as you can and don't include things that will confuse you or your reader. Like when you repeat two words, misspell words, miss words, and leave words out. I hope these tips will help you and now your writing will be ready to be a masterpiece.   

More of Scavenger News

                Good morning this is Alejandro reporting from Scavenger News. First up, remember the Shooting Spree caused by Brian Nichols? Here is the story about the woman that Brain Nichols kept hostage. We will leave you with Marcos to tell you about the story.

            After the shooting spree in the courthouse Brian Nichols went into woman’s home and took her hostage. Ashley Smith soon realized that the man who took her hostage was the one who killed the judge as well as other people. She thought that those were her last hours of life. She then told him about her daughter that had only one parent. Also, she told him that without her she would die. Brian Nichols let Ashley go see her daughter. Immediately she called 911. In minutes the police was already there. Waving a white shirt he gave up. Now, he is in jail. This was Marcos reporting from Atlanta, Georgia.

            Next up, we have some fast facts about Sally Ride. Sally was born in California in 1951. She made her mark as a cosmic explorer. She worked as a NASA astronaut and helped design the space shuttle’s robotic arm. She was the first American women to go out into space.

            Thank you for watching Scavenger News, and we’re flying off until tomorrow. Have a good day.

Tips and More Tips

  This morning I was on this website that gave us tips on writing. I chose this one because I thought it was really important. 

   Re-write, re-write, re-write. Tear every sentence apart and analyze it. Does it flow? Is it passive or active? The best writers use an active writing voice as much as possible. So instead of saying: “She picked up the pencil,” say instead, “She grabbed the pencil.” Don’t sweat it if it seems to take a century to create something good, that’s how you learn. And with experience the writing process becomes easier. Promise.

  You read what was on the top didn't you? Well, if you did here are some of my tips to give to everyone who loves writing. Try to use good words like in our school we have blooms taxonomy such as knowledge, comprehension, application, analysis,synthesis, and evaluation. In the word knowledge you can have state, name, describe, recall, and more.    

My Wacky Tale

One morning I was doing a Wacky Tale, we were choosing a topic that caught our attention. We had to choose some exciting words for our wacky tale. I got this one that caught my attention in a hook. 

One hairy day our class went hiking along the Conyers River. Like all humongous hikers, we were ready for any emergency. In our backpacks, we carried milkshakes, pizzas, and one poison dart frog.

  As we walked along the trail, Ms.Tobler noticed a nasty footprint. "Do you think a hog made these tracks?" Ms.Tobler asked.

   "No, but let's follow the them anyway," suggested Marcos.

   We shouted for hours. Then I screamed, "Oh Man!! I think I see a huge brain."

  "Wow!!!" they heard someone say. It was Ms. Hooper.

  " Ms. Hooper!" they screamed. "We thought you were a huge brain!"

   "Do I look like a huge brain? Well, as long as you're all here, you can   help me look for lice. There are lots of them here along the Conyers River. We can take them back to school and study them under our microscopes."

  " Wow!!!" everyone said.

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Welcome To JHH

             Hello, and welcome to J.H.House Elementary School where your child is at home. Here we learn what to do while your child doesn't know what to do in class. We are always here to help you out with any question. We will assign you a student to show you what things are, where things are, and which class you will be in.

             Hey, how are you doing today? O.K. This map shows you where the restrooms are and the rest of the school. You might see your teacher, and she will tell you your class schedule. Meanwhile, I will tell you what you will learn in this school. Let’s start with science, in this subject you will be learning about friction and magnetism. Also, you may do about three experiments on these subjects.I think you might enjoy this unit.

          Math is another subject that you will learn at this school. Right now you are going to do fractions, to be specific equivalent fractions. If you have any problems about math you should tell your teacher and don’t be afraid to ask. All the teachers can help you out on the problems you have.

            We move on to writing, in this subject you will learn the six traits of effective writing. I believe that you will write two stories in this semester.  I am sure that you will improve a lot on writing and your handwriting.

            Next thing on the list, social studies, in this subject you will learn about World War I through this semester. Social Studies is a really important subject in this school. You should get good grades if you pay attention.

            Reading is one of the most important things that you have to pass on the CRCT test. In this subject you will learn about fact and opinion, reading strategies, and comprehension. You will be put in a lower reading group, but if you read good you will be placed on a higher reading group.

            The last subject you need to understand is spelling. This subject you will get spelling words each week that you have to know how to spell by the end of the week so you can take a spelling test. If you study you should get good grades.

             Then, you might do CNN, CNN is news  that we watch every day in the morning. This subject will help you learn what is going around the world. You are lucky because we are the only school in Rockdale County that does CNN. This subject is really important because other students watch the news but they don't discuss what they see and listen. However, we always take notes and discuss what we saw. This subject is really important because you could learn what is happening around the world and what things are happening in space. Such as Deep Impact.

              If you are chosen to be in the weblog group, man are you going to be excited. In this group you will learn about posting stories on the internet. Also, you will improve on your writing skills. If you don't like writing you should take that back because once you are in this group you will love writing. You can write about anything you want so other people can read it. Once you've done that you will get admired all around the state or even the world! This subject you got to love because you can speak out to the world and make opinions.

            Now you are ready to be in this school and know what happens around you. Do you have any questions? Do you have anything you have to say?

Scavenger News

     This is Alejandro reporting from Scavenger News on a NEWS FLASH!!! We have just received information that two men who are 17 and 18 years old have been charged on a death penalty. The Supreme Court had to make a decision whether or not they should give the death penalty for the 17 year old teen. They had to rule out the death penalty for the people who are under the age of 18.

      In a four to five decision on a case from Missouri, U.S. Supreme Court ruled that the execution to the 18 year old man should get the death penalty because he made 24 murders in nineteen states.

      The lack, or laziness, of maturity is undeveloped and the responsibility are found more in youth than in adults. The not so amazing qualities will result in awfully and impetuous and ill considered actions, but authorities disagree. Well that was our News Flash catch us on JHH channel at 9:30 P.M.