My brother and I always fight tooth and nail to know who gets to sit in front of the truck. When he wins I always hit the roof. My brother said if I played a trick on him chickens would come home to roost me. So, I chilled out. So I wouldn't have to pull on his leg all day so I clammed up. So I soft-soaped him so if I needed help with something he would helped me. Or if I needed to borrow something he would let me. But when I tried to soft-soap me my dad had already found out that we always fight to see who gets to sit in the front. I wasn't the only one skating on thin ice. We were both in big trouble but we survived together. But ,also got grounded for a month and if my dad caught us fighting tooth and nail for anything again we would have been grounded for two whole entire months. This is my story and P.S. I never hit the roof even if somebody slapped you only if you have permission too.
P.S. Happy Valentine's Day!
Hi Angelica,
I like all the idioms you used in this story. It is a good first draft. Now comes the editing. One suggestion - check the phrase "chickens would come home to roost me" and see if you can rewrite that part. Good work on your first idiom story! You'll get it even better!
Mrs. Davis
Posted by: Anne Davis | February 18, 2004 at 11:23 PM
Angelica, you did a great job on your idiom story. I liked the way you used your idioms as well. One sugesstion is that you could explain why you and your brother always fight. Overall, you did well.
Posted by: Jennifer | February 19, 2004 at 09:43 AM
Mrs.Davis I will try to improve myself. I will give more time to read my articles to make sure it makes sense instead of watching T.V. I thank you for the suggestion you are like a superthinker to me. Also, thankyou for complimenting on my writing I really worked hard on it.
Posted by: Angelica | February 19, 2004 at 10:07 AM
Thankyou for the compliment on my writing. I will do the thilng you told me to thankyou for helping me also.
Posted by: Angelica | February 19, 2004 at 10:13 AM
Thankyou for the compliment on my writing. I will do the thing you told me to thankyou for helping me also.
Posted by: Angelica | February 19, 2004 at 10:14 AM
Angelica,Your writing made me think about when me and my sister fight tooth and nail. Your web blog went right on w/ the title. Thats usually what Mrs.Davis is looking for. At the end of your blog when you put "p.s." what you wrote really didn't make sence, could you explain it to me?
Posted by: Anne Davis | March 25, 2004 at 10:09 AM
Thankyou Amber for the comment! But the P.S. thing I meant to say that if somebody hurt me I wouln't get really really mad. But if I had permission to I would of been the madest!
Posted by: Anne Davis | March 25, 2004 at 10:15 AM