Ashley's Maze

Fixing Tips

       Pretend you are writing to a very important person. That is a tip I wrote. Yet, I have to bump it up, as my teacher Mrs. Davis says.   Maybe I should write a tip that says, Act like you are writng to your role model! Never be shy when it comes to writing! I like my revised version better. How about you?

Six Traits of Writing

               Today I read a story from TFK and I found some sentences that shwo the six traits of writing.

                                  FIT   FOR   A    KING

           The tombs of the pharaohs who ruled in ancient times are among Egypt' s most scared treasures. I think Ideas and Contents go with that sentence.

            In the story it shows Organization because it tells about everything in different paragraphs.

            For Word Choice the words in the story most scared treasures, sarcophagus, Ramses VI, pharaohs, and Egyptian king are very interresting.

             There are ten nice and long sentences and that shows Sentence Fluency.

             In the story the title talks about a king and so does the story.   That is a Convention. 

Web Tips

        Do you like to write? Are you looking for tips? Well you are in the right place! Here is some tips that I made for young writers.

1.       Pretend you are writing to a very important person.
2.       Tell about exciting stories. " Keep your audience enjoyed. "
3.        Use a review question about your writing when you finish it. " How do you feel about your this writng? "
4.        Examine your writing before annoucing it. " Prof it many times. "
5.        Organize your writings. " Beggining, Middle, and End. "
6.         Select a title to go with your writings. " Amazing Tips for Kids "

Nichols Strikes!

            Nichols shot and killed four people in court. He killed the judge, the officer, and the court reporter.

             It is so sad. He was not even in handcuffs or shackels. That was not fair. He could have killed everybody.

             After the shooting he ran. Then he held a girl hostage. I bet she was terrified.

             Nichols went beside a car and when the lady got out he walked behind her. She could have called the police, but she didn't. The police still found him. He literally waved a white flag. He surrendered.

                  The lady, Ashley, who owned the car got him to surrender. She gave him a nice talk, because she believed in him. So, she got a wonderful $10,000 reward. Amazing, huh?

                   His daughter and wife were on Good Morning America.His daughter wanted to know if he had any other children. He had left her when she was a lot younger. She never thought he would do something like that. 

              What would you do if your dad was a killer?            

Toad

      To all the people that wanted to hear my poem here it is:

                                                Toad

                   I had a toad

                      He ran in the road

                             His name was Icky

                                   His girlfriends name was Vicky

                                            She had bad breath

                                                     and kissed Seth

                                                               So he never came back again!

Ashley's Tips for Writing

      I read a tip from Tips For Young Writers.

Tip 3: Chop it out! Sometimes things are better left unsaid. Always check your work to be sure every word has a place and slash the ones that stick out.

       I think it means like when you give too much information, people might get bored.   It gives the same information over and over again. It can sometimes be too wordy.

           Here is some tips I made: Tip 1: Always use higher level thinking words from Bloom's Taxonomy and use vivid words.

       Tip 2: Don't copy the same word over and over again.

        Tip 3: Revise your work before reading in front of a audience.

         Tip 4: Use your voice in your writing.

         Tip 5: Don't write about something that bores you. It is important to enjoy your own writing.

The Great Dough Disaster

                Today we had fun at the Wacky Web Tale site!

           Last summer, my friend Mike got a job at the brown Pastry Shop. For the first few weeks, he punched the floors, kisseed on the shelves, and unloaded one hundred-pound sacks of flour from the delivery trucks.

Finally, Hilary Duff, the owner, told Mike that she would teach him to make bread. "Now, pay attention, Mike," she said sleepy. "I'll make the first batch of dough. Then you can make the next batch while I go to Dave and Busters."

Poor Mike! He had a habit of letting his eyes wander. When Hilary Duff left for Dave and Busters, he started to mix the ingredients. "Let me see," he said. "I think she put in ten hundred packages of yeast."

A short while later, the dough started bitting. It kept on bitting. Mike tried to cover it with a bat, but the dough wouldn't stop bitting. It was everywhere! "What can I do?" thought Mike.

Just then, Hilary Duff returned from Dave and Busters. " Mike!" she screamed. "What have you done?"

"It's not my fault," cried Mike. "The dough just started bitting and wouldn't stop."

Hilary Duff had to let him go. Now Mike has a job making cats. I don't think he'll ever eat bread again, let alone make it.

A New Flow for Middle Schools!

            Weblogging is awesome. We get to blog about the news. I blog about animals, movies, T.V. shows, and global news. Sometimes we blog to Mrs. Davis' s college students. The class gets comments from

people around the world.

              In third, fourth, and fifth grade we watched CNN student news. It helps us a lot with weblogging. Like when we write about the news CNN helps us to write more. When I did a report on tsunamis, it helped to look at my CNN notes. 

              I think that middle schools should have weblogging  because it makes your writing exquisite. Blogging made my writing longer and more interesting. I used to write short stories and didn' t  use  vivid  words. Now I am one of the best writers in class. You could be a great writer, too.

                Middle schools kids need help with writing. Some kids can not write well. Weblogging will you a great writer.

             Mrs. Davis helped me a lot. She taught us how to make  hyperlinks, use vivid words, not to use the same words, and many more things.

             It is fun to blog on the internet. It is like your diary, but better. People love your writings. You get some very nice comments.  I got comments from Pat Street , a famous writer. She writes nice, long comments. So, you could get comments from people that you don' t even know. That is the fun of it.

               All schools should have webloggers.

                  

Late Winter Up North

    This is Ashley from JH HOUSE NEWS REPORTER. Todays news is updating cold weather in North Carolina to Maine.  Results of this chilly storm is flight cancellations, schools are closing, and the need to clear snow covered roads.

      Some towns were buried in six-foot tall drifts in Massachusetts. Part of Blue Ridge Mountians were covered in one foot of snow. Clifton, New Jersey is only getting six inches.

        So get your coat on before going outside. You should really bundle up!

         Next up is ID  ME. I am the transfer of a court case to another court case:

                                          A change of venue

                                          B lawyer

                                          C Supreme Court

                                           Answer -  change of venue   

                And that's it from JH HOUSE REPORTERS!