U.S. troops have searched all over Pakistan and still have not found Osama, where do you think he could be hiding in Pakistan?
This is a news lead and I hope I have the who, what, when, where ,and why.
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Hi Derrick,
I think you covered almost everything except you assume everyone knows who Osama is; you may want to insert a line about Osama being hunted because of his links to international terrioism. Here is a little background:
Osama Bin Laden is both one of the CIA's most wanted men and a hero to many young people in the Arab world. He and his associates were already being sought by the US on charges of international terrorism, including in connection with the 1998 bombing of American embassies in Africa and last year's attack on the USS Cole in Yemen.
Bin Laden, an immensely wealthy and private man, has been granted a safe haven by Afghanistan's ruling Taleban movement. During his time in hiding, he has called for a holy war against the US, and for the killing of Americans and Jews. He is reported to be able to rally around him up to 3,000 fighters. He is also suspected of helping to set up Islamic training centres to prepare soldiers to fight in Chechnya and other parts of the former Soviet Union.
His power is founded on a personal fortune earned by his family's construction business in Saudi Arabia. Born in Saudi Arabia to a Yemeni family, Bin Laden left Saudi Arabia in 1979 to fight against the Soviet invasion of Afghanistan.
Just a little info for you. Keep writing.
Julie
Free Speech
From Time for Kids
our comments are in pink.
Stephen Downs, 61, and his 31-year-old son, Roger, went shopping at a mall in Guilderland, New York, last Monday. They got a lot more than they bargained for.
The two had T-shirts printed. Roger's said, "No War with Iraq." His dad's said, "Peace on Earth." They put on the shirts over their other clothes. The antiwar messages caught the attention of a security guard, who asked the men to take off the shirts. They refused. The guard came back with a police officer, who asked them to remove the shirts or leave. Roger took his off, but his dad still said no.
"I said, 'All right then, arrest me if you have to,'" Stephen Downs recalls. "So they did. They put the handcuffs on and took me away." Two days later, about 100 protesters marched in the mall to support Downs. A trespassing charge was dropped, but both men were upset.
"I think he'd like an apology," Roger said of his father.
this lead is effective because it tells a definite story about the main character of the story. That's how you start out a good feature lead, you start by telling an interesting story about someone.
Americans treasure free speech and expression. Our right to share our ideas--by writing them in books, shouting them at a rally or ironing them onto T-shirts--is protected by the First Amendment. The amendment is one of 10 in the Bill of Rights, added to the Constitution in 1791. Lawmakers of the day passed the Bill of Rights because they believed that some key freedoms, including speech protection, should be part of the Constitution.
the nut graph tells all of the important details of a story, it's the paragraph above. it's what explains the lead and what the article is about. it's probably the most important paragraph in an article.
But First Amendment experts say that the right to speak freely comes with an unwritten requirement to act responsibly. "Many Americans have an overdeveloped sense of rights and an underdeveloped sense of responsibility," says Sam Chaltain, coordinator of the First Amendment Schools project. "Our rights are spelled out in the First Amendment. But the amendment will work only if we guard the rights of those with whom we disagree."
this is how you format a correct quote. introduce the person with what they have to say. The source is also very clearly notified with in the quote. the set up sentence is in blue, the quote is in green and good because it relates to the article.
With a possible war in Iraq looming, emotions across the country are running high. Last Wednesday, tens of thousands of high school and college students all over America left their classrooms and staged large antiwar demonstrations. Other Americans feel just as strongly about expressing support for our leaders' decisions. Those groups also held rallies and spoke out. When the two points of view clash, trouble can follow.
This paragraph is some information about the story. it just adds more information to make the story better.
Take Toni Smith, a basketball player for Manhattanville College in New York. Because she objects to certain U.S. policies, she does not salute the flag as the national anthem is played before her games.
Some opposing teams' fans began to boo Smith. They wore American flag pins and waved the flag to taunt her. On February 23, a Vietnam War veteran came onto the court and held a flag in front of her. He was thrown out of the arena--not for expressing his view but for disrupting the game.
"Toni Smith was being patriotic by doing what she felt she must," Chaltain told TFK. "Every person who chose to stand and put a hand over his heart during the anthem was exercising the same freedom."
The First Amendment is often amended itself. Court decisions have limited its freedoms to protect individuals' privacy or national security, among other goals. But speaking out, whether in favor of the government's policies or against them, is among the fundamental rights--and responsibilities--of every American. It is, in fact, at the very heart of our democracy.
The rest of all these paragraphs are the story and what happened and what was going on. these are details that are good for keeping the story interesting.
Hey Dave, that really helped me figure out how a great nutgraph actually can be made. Details are my specialty in stories but in paragraphs, my mind just flies away and I loose my paragraph and then my mind go blank. That is very helpful in the nutgraph. Where do you get your ideas from for your awsome nutgraphs?Why didStephen Downs get arrested just forhaving freedom of speech and aT-shirt?That was my question that I need answered.
Thanks for the tips for my nutgraphs!
Your friend,
Derrick:-)
Hey Julie, Osama would be the CIA's most wanted and I see where you are going with that by why would Osama be rich and wealthy? Does he have a buissness or something? Osama is the hero of the Arabs is what I know so far and will always stay in my head forever. Did you know that Osama gets some of his money from the terrorist groups that he works with? That really made me excited that I learned something new today.
Thanks for the information of OSBL (Osama Bin Laden).
Sincerely,
Derrick :-)
Hi Derrick,
I think you covered almost everything except you assume everyone knows who Osama is; you may want to insert a line about Osama being hunted because of his links to international terrioism. Here is a little background:
Osama Bin Laden is both one of the CIA's most wanted men and a hero to many young people in the Arab world. He and his associates were already being sought by the US on charges of international terrorism, including in connection with the 1998 bombing of American embassies in Africa and last year's attack on the USS Cole in Yemen.
Bin Laden, an immensely wealthy and private man, has been granted a safe haven by Afghanistan's ruling Taleban movement. During his time in hiding, he has called for a holy war against the US, and for the killing of Americans and Jews. He is reported to be able to rally around him up to 3,000 fighters. He is also suspected of helping to set up Islamic training centres to prepare soldiers to fight in Chechnya and other parts of the former Soviet Union.
His power is founded on a personal fortune earned by his family's construction business in Saudi Arabia. Born in Saudi Arabia to a Yemeni family, Bin Laden left Saudi Arabia in 1979 to fight against the Soviet invasion of Afghanistan.
Just a little info for you. Keep writing.
Julie
Posted by: Julie Corey | March 19, 2003 at 07:43 AM
Free Speech
From Time for Kids
our comments are in pink.
Stephen Downs, 61, and his 31-year-old son, Roger, went shopping at a mall in Guilderland, New York, last Monday. They got a lot more than they bargained for.
The two had T-shirts printed. Roger's said, "No War with Iraq." His dad's said, "Peace on Earth." They put on the shirts over their other clothes. The antiwar messages caught the attention of a security guard, who asked the men to take off the shirts. They refused. The guard came back with a police officer, who asked them to remove the shirts or leave. Roger took his off, but his dad still said no.
"I said, 'All right then, arrest me if you have to,'" Stephen Downs recalls. "So they did. They put the handcuffs on and took me away." Two days later, about 100 protesters marched in the mall to support Downs. A trespassing charge was dropped, but both men were upset.
"I think he'd like an apology," Roger said of his father.
this lead is effective because it tells a definite story about the main character of the story. That's how you start out a good feature lead, you start by telling an interesting story about someone.
Americans treasure free speech and expression. Our right to share our ideas--by writing them in books, shouting them at a rally or ironing them onto T-shirts--is protected by the First Amendment. The amendment is one of 10 in the Bill of Rights, added to the Constitution in 1791. Lawmakers of the day passed the Bill of Rights because they believed that some key freedoms, including speech protection, should be part of the Constitution.
the nut graph tells all of the important details of a story, it's the paragraph above. it's what explains the lead and what the article is about. it's probably the most important paragraph in an article.
But First Amendment experts say that the right to speak freely comes with an unwritten requirement to act responsibly. "Many Americans have an overdeveloped sense of rights and an underdeveloped sense of responsibility," says Sam Chaltain, coordinator of the First Amendment Schools project. "Our rights are spelled out in the First Amendment. But the amendment will work only if we guard the rights of those with whom we disagree."
this is how you format a correct quote. introduce the person with what they have to say. The source is also very clearly notified with in the quote. the set up sentence is in blue, the quote is in green and good because it relates to the article.
With a possible war in Iraq looming, emotions across the country are running high. Last Wednesday, tens of thousands of high school and college students all over America left their classrooms and staged large antiwar demonstrations. Other Americans feel just as strongly about expressing support for our leaders' decisions. Those groups also held rallies and spoke out. When the two points of view clash, trouble can follow.
This paragraph is some information about the story. it just adds more information to make the story better.
Take Toni Smith, a basketball player for Manhattanville College in New York. Because she objects to certain U.S. policies, she does not salute the flag as the national anthem is played before her games.
Some opposing teams' fans began to boo Smith. They wore American flag pins and waved the flag to taunt her. On February 23, a Vietnam War veteran came onto the court and held a flag in front of her. He was thrown out of the arena--not for expressing his view but for disrupting the game.
"Toni Smith was being patriotic by doing what she felt she must," Chaltain told TFK. "Every person who chose to stand and put a hand over his heart during the anthem was exercising the same freedom."
The First Amendment is often amended itself. Court decisions have limited its freedoms to protect individuals' privacy or national security, among other goals. But speaking out, whether in favor of the government's policies or against them, is among the fundamental rights--and responsibilities--of every American. It is, in fact, at the very heart of our democracy.
The rest of all these paragraphs are the story and what happened and what was going on. these are details that are good for keeping the story interesting.
Posted by: Dave | March 19, 2003 at 10:04 AM
Hey Dave, that really helped me figure out how a great nutgraph actually can be made. Details are my specialty in stories but in paragraphs, my mind just flies away and I loose my paragraph and then my mind go blank. That is very helpful in the nutgraph. Where do you get your ideas from for your awsome nutgraphs?Why didStephen Downs get arrested just forhaving freedom of speech and aT-shirt?That was my question that I need answered.
Thanks for the tips for my nutgraphs!
Your friend,
Derrick:-)
Posted by: Derrick | March 20, 2003 at 09:23 AM
Hey Julie, Osama would be the CIA's most wanted and I see where you are going with that by why would Osama be rich and wealthy? Does he have a buissness or something? Osama is the hero of the Arabs is what I know so far and will always stay in my head forever. Did you know that Osama gets some of his money from the terrorist groups that he works with? That really made me excited that I learned something new today.
Thanks for the information of OSBL (Osama Bin Laden).
Sincerely,
Derrick :-)
Posted by: Derrick | March 20, 2003 at 09:59 AM