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Yoceline

Hi Jerry!
This is a very good draft. You have shown such good thinking and the story does flow. My suggestion is that you work a little on the ending so we understand your use of "bed of roses." I am proud of you!
Mrs. Davis

Angelica

Jerry, Great Job! But,try to add more details or more facts. To make the audience understand why for example you were on your toes try to add more details to understand why. But the rest is excellent keep up the good work!

Angelica

Jerry, Great Job! But,try to add more details or more facts. To make the audience understand why for example you were on your toes try to add more details to understand why. But the rest is excellent keep up the good work!

Jerry

Ms.Davis, Thank you for your wonderful comment. I will try to make my ending alot more specific so you can understand more what I meant by bed of roses. See Ya!

Jerry

Angelica, Thankyou for your comment on my idiom story. I will try my best to put more detail in my story. See Ya!

student

Hi Jerry:
Youre right. The California is by the Pacific Ocean. The water is cold. Is the Atlantic Ocean warm?
Sandra

SuperThinker

Hi Jerry - SuperThinker here paying a visit to your blog. Well, if you had ants in your pants then you really must have gotten a kick out of the game. As for my superblogging self--I sure do get a kick out of your writing!

Jerry

Thanks you Mrs.Davis for your wonderful comment. When I had put ''bed of roses'' I kind of didn't understand what it meant until I kept going over the definition over and over again.Well its been nice talking to you. See Ya!

Jerry

Thanks Super Think for your wonderful comment. I really did get a kick out the game and out of writing too. Well its been nice talking to you. See Ya!

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