Two Russians plains crashed on Thursday. These plains were passenger plains and were holding more than 42 passengers. One of them had a terrorist on board and the other one the engine exploded. They were 400 feet away from each other and one of the Russians herd a big explosion then there was silence then another big explosion and then there was fire. They say that they almost fell at the same time. Have you been on a plain. Explain how would feel if you were in the plane?
My revised version:
Have you ever been in a plane crash or ever seen a plane crash? Think how you would feel if you were in a plane crash do you think you would survive? Two Russians planes crashed on Thursday night with more than 42 humans. One of them had a terrorist and posted a signal then the other one the engine exploded. They were 400 feet awy from each other. They say they almost fell at the same time. Have you ever been on a plane. Explain how would you fell if you were in one of those planes.
What a tragic story! You gave a lot of good details. Have you learned any more about the incident?
Posted by: Mrs. Davis | October 27, 2004 at 08:26 PM
Thanks for answering my paragraph. I thought I could add more things but I coudnt. So I'll try my best next time and add more vivide words and deatails.How would you add more deatails?
Posted by: juan | October 28, 2004 at 09:16 AM