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Kelley F.

Hi Lindsay! This is Alexa and Kelley! We are ready to give you some feedback on your news item. You seem to be doing a great job so far!
First of all, we really like how you started out with questions. It draws in the reader and gives a good introduction to you story. The only thing to remember in news leads is to include the "who," "what," "when," "where," and "why." This would strengthen your lead because it would give all of the facts to the story. We also like the "dirty dog" fact about the name Saddam. We did not know that his name meant "dirty dog."
The last paragraph is very good because it gives all of the facts of the story. It could be considered the "nut graph." Like we said before, if you move some of these facts up to the lead, this would strengthen it a little bit. You are really doing a great job so far though, and you seem to have you facts straight! Keep up your great work!

LindsayG

A million thanks would not express my gratitude.Thank you for everything you have done this year. Thanks for always being there if I needed someone to help. Thanks for being there to bounce ideas off of. Thanks for explaining the parts of a writing and what they should include such as a nutgraph which should have detail that support the story and keep the readers attenion. Also hey which one are you in the picture? In our picture I'm middle row fourth from the left . I'm wearing a slightly cream colored shirt. Sorry I have a bad smile I'm in a very uncomfortable position.THANK YOU, Lindsay G.

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