Marcos' Seaworld of Facts

My Final Post

   Well, this is my last post with my buddies. We've been through many things together. We were like a family.  I kind of feel sad because you won't be able to read my posts and that I might never see Mrs. Davis again. I learned many things like improving my writing. The year went flying.  I wish this would never end. I remember all the good times we had. I am going to miss the weblog group. Thank you all for being such wonderful audience.

Learning From Writing

    It looks like this is our last month weblogging. My learning has gone higher then I expected. I learned that you did to pass my knowledge to other people. Tips and words of wisdom have helped me in my writing.  Weblogging  has taught to work with others and improve my communication skills as well as sharing knowledge with the audience. When I'm blogging I feel like a brand new person. We all learned that having a choice matters as well as having a voice.  I also learned to think outside the box which means that I experimenting with writing. My wish for the future of weblogging is to  let other kids blog.

My Opinion About Testing

    Yes, the CRCT is over. I kind of liked the test because we didn't have homework, we went outside, and watched some movies. Testing is a way to know how smart you are.  Testing can make people feel bad too. If a person has a bad day they might be judged by saying that they are not smart.I didn't like it because we didn't get to use mechanical pencils. We also had to sit quietly for almost an  hour. Do you like testing? why or why not.

Tips for Weblogs

     Here are some helpfull tips for when you're weblogging. First, don't be discouraged if you get a bad comment just move on. The important thing is you're happy with what you wrote.

Second, make sure your writing makes since. First draft ,to be contiuned.

The Adventure

Two weeks ago we got to choose our on topic to write about it. I chose a fantasy. Well hear it goes. 

    "Yes, yes, yes," I shouted at the top of my lungs. I had won three tickets to Egypt. I took two of friends Johny and Alejandro. A big yellow airport van came and picked us up. When we arrived at the big, blue, low rider plane Johny fell into a trashcan. "Help," Johny exclaimed. We got him out, but he smelled like a dead fish.

  The plane was about to leave  us , but we got on in the nick of time. Johny still smelled like dead fish,  and had to seat at the back. "Oh no," Johny yelled. "What's wrong now," we asked. "I forgot my Hot Cheetos," Johny said. "Here I got a bag," said Alejandro. "Oh one more thing you need to take a bath," Alejandro replied.

   After six long hours of traveling we arrived. All we saw was sand and more sand. "Okay, I'm bored," Johny complained. "Oh quit your belly aching," we screamed. We waited for three hours for the taxi to come and pick us up.

     Then we heard a rumble from behind. It was a huge chocolate tank. It shot a gumball at the taxi. We ran as fast as we could. We followed the tank to a huge palace. We went into the palace.

   Then we saw the tank going down a stairway. We followed it. The we saw a room full of candy. The top of the tank opened and a boy came out of it. It was Juan with a glowing blue piece of candy. He put it in a tomb that said Two Ton Candy. Then Juan turned 50 feet tall. All the candy was sticking to him and he turned into candy.

  He saw us and chased us  into a prison. We were trapped when Johny began eating Hot Cheetos and became 50 feet tall. "Give us some," we told Johny. "Okay here," he said. We turned 50 feet tall too. Juan saw us and shut us with gumballs. Then Johny started  glowing  like the Hot Cheetos and we started to do the same too.

  We quickly melted Juan into goo and ran outside. We began to recover our normal size. We told all the children of Egypt to come to the palace and take some candy. We took some too. When we got  back to the U.S. everybody asked us about our journey. So we told everybody.

My Opinion About Weblogs

   I have just finished reading Inappropriate Comments=  Teachable Moments posted by Mrs. Davis. It made me form an opinion about why weblogs should be allowed.

   I think weblogs should be allowed in schools because it is part of our education. Weblogging has made me a better writer and thinker. Sometimes we get an inappropriate comment but that doesn't slow us down. It is not the end of the world because someone has called you a bad name. You can't stop that from happening. When we get an inappropriate comment we learn a lesson and that lesson is not to be like that person. We also learn responsibility on the Internet. If you were in a race and someone called you a bad name, would you stop? I think not. Martin Luther King Jr. was called bad names all the time and it didn't stop him from fulfilling his dream.  Thinks like this happen all the time, even out of school. So, please don't shut down weblogs.

Improved Tip

  This was my previous tip but, now I'm going to bump it up.

Grab the readers attention with a catchy lead. Here is an excellent introduction written by Alejandro.  Hey! would you like to transform your writing into a masterpiece?  A catchy lead can make readers read your writing.                        

  This is my revised tip.

    Make the readers' eyes stick to your post like glue with a catchy lead.  Here is a catchy lead from Alejandro. Hey would you like to transform your writing  into a masterpiece?  His lead made me want to read his post.  A catchy lead will make the readers  hang to every word you're saying.

Mount Saint Helens Acts Up

     This morning I was reading a Time For Kids magazine when something caught my eye. It was  about Mount St. Helens acting up again. For the past six months, Mount St. Helens, in Washington state, has been rumbling. On March, 8 Mt. St. Helens spewed  a humongous 30,000 foot cloud of ash!  If I were in that  situation I would to my house and hide under my bed. The eruption sent tourists running for their lives as if they were being chased by a giant man eater bug.  Mt. St. Helens has been tempted to erupt since September 23, 2004.  Thousands of tiny earthquakes shock the mountain as if it were a piggy bank. Scientists are not keeping there eyes off the sleeping giant.  The last time it blew it's top off was May 18,1980. Forests were turned into ashes like a card box in a fire. Predict what would happen to the sleeping giant.

   I took this article and rewrote it in my own words. This is an example of  word choice and voice. We are studying  Six Traits Of Writing in class. It is in my own words because I didn't copy every word from the article. It is in voice because I'm saying my opinions.

Writing Tips

   Here are some tips to make your writing better and interesting.

  First, always check your work.  Checking or proofreading work is really important, because it makes your writing more interesting and readable.  It is easy to make mistakes on your writing. I still make mistakes on my writing.  You can check your writing  by reading your writing softly out loud, or you can use a dictionary.

  Second, use vivid vocabulary to make pictures in your  readers' heads. Vivid vocabulary is also known as dialog. Dialog brings your writing to life, and more interesting. If you don't use dialog readers won't read your writing and it will be boring.

     Third, grab the readers attention with a catchy lead. Here is an excellent introduction written by Alejandro.  Hey! would you like to transform your writing into a masterpiece?  A catchy lead can make readers read your writing. Have you ever used writing tips?

The capturing of Brian Nicholas

     Marcos here reporting from the J.H. House Webloggers. This just in,Brian Nicholas has been caputered!  I repeat, he has been captured! The brave woman who turned him in is Ashley Smith. We'll live you with our number one reporter Alejandro.  Okay, I'm here with Ashley Smith. How did you turn him in what happened?  "Well, I was going into my apartment when he pushed me from behind. He told me if I screamed he would hurt me. Hie  tied me up and locked me in my bathroom. I told him to let me go.  After telling him about my daughter and that she had no father he let me go.  I went to see my daughter. After that I went back to my apartment he was still their. I talked him  into turning himself in. When he did I called 911 and a SWAT team arrived.  I might go visit him in prison, but I'm thinking about it," says Ashley Smith.  Okay, Marcos over to you. Nicholas is being accused of murder and harassment. He might get death penalty. Before we go the world's largest surf board. It was built in Australia. It nearly took a month to complete. 40 people rode on it breaking the record of 14. Until next time. What would you do if a criminal was in your house?