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    "Goal," I screamed. We were playing a soccer game at the soccer field. My team was named the Rockdale Rottweilers and the other team were the Martians From Mars.The score was 2 to 1 my team was winning. On my team it was  me, Alejandro, Johny, and Javier. On the Martians From Mars were Juan, Patrick, Bobby, and Jose. "No Bobby's team scored a goal,"I screamed.We quickly huddled up and planned our play. "Here it goes,"  said. I would take ball and pass it to Javier and Javier would pass it to Johnny and he would pass it to Alejandro who would be near the net. It was time to put our plan into action. I quickly passed the ball to Javier  before Juan attacked. Here it goes Javier passes the ball to Johny and Johnny  quickly passes the ball to Alejandro and goal by the Rockdale Rottweilers," I screamed. We had won the game. If you could create a sport. What would that sport be like?and how would you play that sport.

Posted by on February 17, 2005 at 10:02 AM in Sports |

Comments

Pat Street

Oh boy, Marcos! I really hope you grow up to be a sportswriter, or maybe a sports announcer on TV! You really got me involved in the fast action of the soccer game you are describing. I love everything about your post, from the exciting beginning, to the funny team names you chose! I liked the way you established who was on each team and which team was winning, right up front. I enjoyed your use of dialogue, too.

The only thing I can think of to improve your piece is to use another word for "screamed" instead of using "screamed" three times. (You could use "yelled" for one of them, maybe.)

I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing, Marcos! You're a winner just like the Rockdale Rottweilers! :-)

Pat Street

PS: I like the name of your blog page, too. Have you been to SeaWorld? I live about three miles from SeaWorld in Orlando, Florida. It's my favorite theme park!

Posted by: Pat Street | February 28, 2005 at 12:18 AM

George

Marcos,

I like soccer, too. I play on the Mamaroneck Tigers. Me and Jonathan G. are the forwards on the team. Jonathan is the best center.

peace,
George

Posted by: George | March 03, 2005 at 08:35 PM

Marcos

Hey,
Goerge I play soccer to but not on a team. I play with my friends. I love soccer too.

Posted by: Marcos | March 10, 2005 at 10:01 AM

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