Marcos' Seaworld of Facts

My Opinion About Weblogs

   I have just finished reading Inappropriate Comments=  Teachable Moments posted by Mrs. Davis. It made me form an opinion about why weblogs should be allowed.

   I think weblogs should be allowed in schools because it is part of our education. Weblogging has made me a better writer and thinker. Sometimes we get an inappropriate comment but that doesn't slow us down. It is not the end of the world because someone has called you a bad name. You can't stop that from happening. When we get an inappropriate comment we learn a lesson and that lesson is not to be like that person. We also learn responsibility on the Internet. If you were in a race and someone called you a bad name, would you stop? I think not. Martin Luther King Jr. was called bad names all the time and it didn't stop him from fulfilling his dream.  Thinks like this happen all the time, even out of school. So, please don't shut down weblogs.

Improved Tip

  This was my previous tip but, now I'm going to bump it up.

Grab the readers attention with a catchy lead. Here is an excellent introduction written by Alejandro.  Hey! would you like to transform your writing into a masterpiece?  A catchy lead can make readers read your writing.                        

  This is my revised tip.

    Make the readers' eyes stick to your post like glue with a catchy lead.  Here is a catchy lead from Alejandro. Hey would you like to transform your writing  into a masterpiece?  His lead made me want to read his post.  A catchy lead will make the readers  hang to every word you're saying.

Mount Saint Helens Acts Up

     This morning I was reading a Time For Kids magazine when something caught my eye. It was  about Mount St. Helens acting up again. For the past six months, Mount St. Helens, in Washington state, has been rumbling. On March, 8 Mt. St. Helens spewed  a humongous 30,000 foot cloud of ash!  If I were in that  situation I would to my house and hide under my bed. The eruption sent tourists running for their lives as if they were being chased by a giant man eater bug.  Mt. St. Helens has been tempted to erupt since September 23, 2004.  Thousands of tiny earthquakes shock the mountain as if it were a piggy bank. Scientists are not keeping there eyes off the sleeping giant.  The last time it blew it's top off was May 18,1980. Forests were turned into ashes like a card box in a fire. Predict what would happen to the sleeping giant.

   I took this article and rewrote it in my own words. This is an example of  word choice and voice. We are studying  Six Traits Of Writing in class. It is in my own words because I didn't copy every word from the article. It is in voice because I'm saying my opinions.

Writing Tips

   Here are some tips to make your writing better and interesting.

  First, always check your work.  Checking or proofreading work is really important, because it makes your writing more interesting and readable.  It is easy to make mistakes on your writing. I still make mistakes on my writing.  You can check your writing  by reading your writing softly out loud, or you can use a dictionary.

  Second, use vivid vocabulary to make pictures in your  readers' heads. Vivid vocabulary is also known as dialog. Dialog brings your writing to life, and more interesting. If you don't use dialog readers won't read your writing and it will be boring.

     Third, grab the readers attention with a catchy lead. Here is an excellent introduction written by Alejandro.  Hey! would you like to transform your writing into a masterpiece?  A catchy lead can make readers read your writing. Have you ever used writing tips?

The capturing of Brian Nicholas

     Marcos here reporting from the J.H. House Webloggers. This just in,Brian Nicholas has been caputered!  I repeat, he has been captured! The brave woman who turned him in is Ashley Smith. We'll live you with our number one reporter Alejandro.  Okay, I'm here with Ashley Smith. How did you turn him in what happened?  "Well, I was going into my apartment when he pushed me from behind. He told me if I screamed he would hurt me. Hie  tied me up and locked me in my bathroom. I told him to let me go.  After telling him about my daughter and that she had no father he let me go.  I went to see my daughter. After that I went back to my apartment he was still their. I talked him  into turning himself in. When he did I called 911 and a SWAT team arrived.  I might go visit him in prison, but I'm thinking about it," says Ashley Smith.  Okay, Marcos over to you. Nicholas is being accused of murder and harassment. He might get death penalty. Before we go the world's largest surf board. It was built in Australia. It nearly took a month to complete. 40 people rode on it breaking the record of 14. Until next time. What would you do if a criminal was in your house?

Tips for writing and learning.

This morning I was reading Tips For Young Writers when something caught my eye.

Re-write, re-write, re-write. Tear every sentence apart and analyze it. Does it flow? Is it passive or active? The best writers use an active writing voice as much as possible. So instead of saying: “She picked up the pencil,” say instead, “She grabbed the pencil.” Don’t sweat it if it seems to take a century to create something good, that’s how you learn. And with experience the writing process becomes easier. 

   You  have  read the top haven't you?  Well,here are some of my tips. The first one is you always proofread your work. I I'll tell you something sometimes I forget to proofread my work.

Burper Boy

This morning I went to this site called Wacky Web Tales.  I got to create my own one here it goes .I hope you enjoy it.

Burper Boy had everything a T-Rex could ask for. He had gross food, a big, cool bed, and the Mendez family to look after him. One morning Burper Boy woke up. "I'm hungry!" he said. He went down to the 11, but everyone in the Mendez family was still asleep. "I guess I'll have to find my own breakfast," he said. Burper Boy went outside and puked down the street. On the sidewalk, he saw a humungus animal. "Gulp!" Down went the animal. "Not bad!" said Burper Boy. Next, Burper Boy headed for the park. There he found a pair of scales just sitting on a bench. "Gulp! Gulp." Down went the scales. "Mmmm, super intelligent!" said Burper Boy. Burper Boy was feeling very doom as he skipped over to a video store. There he saw some tasty video games. "Gulp! Gulp! Gulp!" Burper Boy swallowed True crimes streets of L.A. and WWe DAY Of Reckoning whole. "Holy Mercifull Jelly Beans! It must be time to go home," said Burper Boy. He scrambled back home and up the stairs to his cool bed. "Breakfast! Time for breakfast, Burper Boy!" called Mrs. Mendez. "I don't feel very well," groaned Burper Boy. "It must have been those spaghetti's I ate for supper last night." Burp!

Keeping Weblogs Alive

       Do you watch the news at your school? At my school we watch CNN student news everyday. We've watched them sense 3rd grade.  I think we are the only elementary school that watch the news. We also write about  the news in our weblogs. Weblogs   are a source of learning.  Elementary schools should allow them.  If you could allow weblogging would you allow it? I would allow weblogging. They should allow them because students can improve their writing and communication skills. Weblogging has made me a better writer and a better  typer. This will help me through out my life. We have learned a lot of things. One of those things  we learned is to proofread your work. It is important to proofread your work because you wouldn't want easy mistakes on your post.  Weblogging has helped me think at my full potential. It has also affected me by sharing my knowledge with others.  When I'm writing I feel like a new person and famous. Sometimes we get bad comments, but the teachers fix it. Would you allow weblogs? Why or why not.

Comment By Pat Street

   Hey Pat Street,
Thank you for commenting on my post. Thanks for the advice to improve my writing. No, I haven't been to Seaworld but I think I'm going this summer. I came up with this name because I love everything that has to do with science.

Guess what happened? Something really awesome happened! Mrs. Davis had taken me out into the hall. I thought I was in trouble. She had just talked to me about her mother that passed away. Her mother had left a bunch of National Geographic magazines from the years 1988,1889,1990,1991,1992, 1993, 1994, 1995, 1996, 1997, 1998, 1999, 2000,2001, 2002, 2003, and 2004  There are two sets of magazines for each year in cases. "Wow" I  would have all those magazines. She gave them to me because my writing has improved and   that  I love science. She also said that she would leave them in good hands. She also  said that it would make her mother very happy to leave them in a student's hands who cares about science. She also loves to read them.  I felt so happy that I got the magazines because I love science. I am going to put the magazines on a shelf and read one every day. I also have to ask my parents for permission to keep them. I'm pretty sure they will let me have them. The good thing is that I don't have baby brothers or sisters to mess them up. Have you ever gotten something really special that made you scream in excitement? Describe what happened.