Bang! A Huge Crash

Bang! "Did you hear that?", exclaimed my friend. "Yes that was frightening,"I said. You ask, "What happened?" Well, it was some men in their car that hit my fence. They were going extremely to fast and they weren't watching what they were doing. Many people don't care about their lives. They need to watch out what they're doing, they need to know that bad results come to bad reactions.It is very frightening because it's in the middle if the night and it will be the 2nd or 3rd time that it has happened already. Even if it had happened 2 or 3 times you will still be frightened because you are sleeping good and something bad happeneds. Bang! happened and it feels like it went straight through your house. That is what I call a extremely weird expierence.

Comments

[Shelby]

Bang! Bang! choo- choo train common girl lets c your thang!!! Just a joke!
I predict that your selection will get a lot of comments because I think that u put in a lot of effort into your writing!!
Let it roll!!!

Bye
Sly
(Shelby)

[Mrs. Davis]

Wow! I really made some pictures in my head with this story. It held my attention! You used good descriptive words. Be sure to proof though as I found a few errors. Can you be a sleuth and find them and tell me what they were?

[alejandra]

I know, that needs to stop. My mom once had a little crash and she was freaked out, but she was o.k. I wish there was some way to stop it.

[Lacey]

I would say that is a wierd experience, too.I hope that does not happen to me!