M.V.'s Blog

A Good Story's Reflection

                I have noticed many mistakes on my comments.  I have learned  that blogs improve your  grammar by showing you the stuff that you can improve on.    Chris has made some suggestions on how to improve like: figurative language  better word  choice  less errors.  A lot of bloggers  give you suggestions or tips.   Those or useful pieces of information  that  you can improve on.    I also don't like mistakes but they actually help you with  grammar and writing .    I am getting better every time I write because of the tips I get from blogging.    Sometimes if  bloggers don't give tips I can still rely on my brain and on stuff I learn at school.    I also  like mistakes because mistakes are there to tell you that you  need to improveon something .   The less errors you get the better your writing gets.   I like writing because things just pop up easy.

                                                                                           

Crash

          One day a horrible storm was brewing waiting to release its wrath on the townspeople that ignored him. But one day the storm released its wrath. The people who lived on a cove got blew down like a stick. When the storm ended the only survivors were a man, a monkey, a soggy loaf of bread.                                                                                                                                  The next day the man and the monkey had nothing to eat so they decided to eat the soggy loaf of bread. The man was so hungry that he cut the monkey’s tail and cooked the tail over a fire and ate it. The man remembered he had his cell phone so he called his friend who had a jet to pick him up from the cove.

 

                Two hours later the jet comes to pick his friend up when suddenly BOOF BAM CRASH ERRRRR the jets engine blew up.” Commander were going down”, said the friend.” So much for our transportation”, said the man who called him two pick him up. So he stayed there with the monkey.      

 

Photo Courtesy of Chris  

Amazing Technology

The first  time  I  ever  used  a computer was in kindergarten.  I  was using  inspiration.   I  felt  stupid because  I  didn't  know  what  I  was doing.I  just got  a computer  last year  and play games  and have  fun.  After  years past I  figured out  how  to use  it by learning from my big  brother.  I  use  Google and  Yahoo.   Sometimes I just   play  games on Postopia.  The games  are  fun.   Now that  I'm in fifth  grade  blogging  is fun  and  easy because I learn from my mistakes. And if I need help I can talk  to people in class. I  can't  talk to people for help.   I  love  using  the  computer now.  I  also  play  Pokemon every  once  in   a while.