Victoria's Dreams of Wonder

The Shoking Results

   On my last post I had a good bit of mistakes that  I didn't notice. Even when I reread  my post I didn't see my erors. But when I listend to the pod cast one of my teachers had made, I felt so embaranced. The whole world was able to see all of my mistakes. I keep thinking " Why didn't I catch my mistakes before ." But I know that every one makes erors. From now on I  will make shure that I read my writing out loud before i publish it.  Or I can get a friend to read it out loud to me. That way I will probably catch all of my erors. Do you have another way I could catch my mistakes? By the way I'll probably fix my mistakes.

A Whole New World Found By A Girl

      

                A girl named Hailey was dressed in a frilly blue dress. She was going to church, to put new flowers in the vase that sits on the preacher’s podium. When she walked into the church there was no one in sight. So she walked up to the podium, but she accidentally knock over the vase. The vase cracked in half and the ground shuck. She ran outside to tell her mom what happened, but she paused and looked around just to see where she was.                                                                                                                                  

               All she saw was a lake and a forest surrounding it. The lake was so blue that it matched Hailey’s eyes. She was in the middle of no were. She was very interested in the lake so she went swimming. The water was soothing, and her blond hair shined when the sun hit it. After she got out she went walking through the forest. The animals greeted her as she passed them. When the moon came out she though she should get home so she went back to the church. Her only problem was that the vase was broken. If the vase was broken she could never go back home.
          Just as she started to cry she remembered that there was a vase just like that one in the office. So she ran to the office and got it. She put the new flowers in it and placed it on the podium. The ground shuck, but the vase didn't fall. After words she ran outside and she was in her home town again. The weird thing was time never pasted; it was like she never went there. Hailey walk home but she never told anyone about that place and she never went back.