Going to the beach.

One daymy family and I were going to the beach over spring brake we were about to past the beach.  When we were going to past the beach we went over a bridge to see the ocean. We were about to turn in to our hotel and our hotel was called Holiday Inn .  Holiday Inn had a playground with a pool the pool had a water fountain to. Then when the day was over and we had all of that fun we were very tired so we went to bed very quick.  It was 9.00 in the morning and it was Saturday and that was the day to leave and I was mad then my mom and dad and sister woke up  then we went to the beach for about 30 min we went swimming and made sand castles we had a lot of fun.  Then it was time to go home so we went home and tolled our hole family about it.  We had a lot of  fun at the beach.

Photo Courtesy of Chris

Comments

[lindsey]

T.K.,
Sounds like you love to swim. I bet it was very interesting. What did your family think about it?

[Ms. Best]

Sounds like so much fun. Is this a true story? I love going to the beach. My family is from an island so we always like to go to the beach for our vacation. Good writing. I'd like to hear more. Maybe you could write more words about the bridge over the ocean. You could write what the weather was like or how old the bridge was and what it was made. Great story!

[Jim]

T.K.,
I enjoyed the account of your family's trip to the beach. I love to go to the beach also, and the time there always goes by too fast! I like the way that you included a picture of the ocean to help people to see the setting of your story.

[chris]

I'd like some description of the sea! Can you think of some good words for the way the sea looks in your picture?

[t.k]

Dear Ms. Best,
no this is not a true story but I wish I could go to the beach. Ms. Best well I have been to the beach before but I do want to go again. Ms. Best I want to ask you a question have you ever caught a shark before?