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Jingle,Jingle

A Wacky Web Tale

Sing to the tune of “Jingle Bells.”

running through the woods
In a one-puppy open corvete,
Over the fields we go,
humming all the way.
dog on bob-tail ring,
Making spirits bright,
What fun it is to swimming and jogging
A sleighing song tonight!

Jingle cat, jingle cat,
Jingle all the way!
O what fun it is to jumping
In a one-puppy open corvete.
wow!

Jingle cat, jingle cat,
Jingle all the way!
O what fun it is to jumping
In a one-puppy open corvete.

My thank you

Angela, thank you for cheering me up and saying "I think story is very entertaining". Thank you for saying that it really made me happy and confident.

Chris, thank you for making me confident and saying "can I suggest you take you take a look at your direct speech" because now I know to read over my work.

Tina, thank you for saying "scary story's catch the readers attention" now i know to right more scary stories.

Mr.Jones thank you for saying that you like the way "I repeat I am unique and useful" it makes me know people believe in me.

Lani, thank you for "commenting to almost everyone of my comments"  it means alot to me that you would take you time and effort for me.

Michelle, thank you for saying that "i have a wonderful and thoughtful poem" it really encourages me to write more stories.

Mrs.C, thank you for saying "you write directly to your reader" it shows me that I can write to my reader when I try.

Thanks everybody for commenting.

  These is my corrected story.

Grace , Chelsea,  and  Carmine  are  going  to  a  feast  at   their  aunts    house. When they arrived their aunt gave them a dress to go put  on. They went upstairs to put them on. Then they found something so unusual that it is impossible to describe. There were not sure if they should go ask their aunt what it was or see for there self.

          They decided to go see for them self. While they were walking down the hallway they saw a door. When they went in the door they saw a whole different world. When they realized that they were grownups in that world they were shoked. They wanted to go home but when they looked back at the door there was somebody blocking it. They said we have a party to go to we need to go home. The boy said when you are in this world time does not pass by. Then Grace said “how come is this like a magic world”. The boy replied "Yes these are all witches and warlocks if the master sees you he will kill you". They said then let us go out of this world.

          Then the boy let them go out of the magic world he gave them each a necklace that would help them remember the world. When they went out of the hallway they were kids and the hallway was gone. They decided they would never take the necklaces off again.They new that the feast was beginning they went downstairs to see how it was going. They said it was an  adventure upstairs. But they never told why.

 

November 14, 2006 | Permalink | Comments (4)