Do you Like Sandwiches? by Ben

Do you like sandwiches? Then let me tell you something! You should try our eye-catching, mouth-watering subway sandwiches! We have a wide variety of meats, vegetables, and lots more.

Your satisfaction is important to us. That's why we guarantee low prices, and fresh quality products. If we don't meet your satisfaction, you will receive a free meal on your next visit.

To make you feel right at home our store is open 24/7. These hours are to make it more convenient for you and others. Once you drop by, you become part of our subway family. Thank you for buying your favorite sandwiches in your local shopping-center. Thank you and as always, have a great sub-day!!!

Comments

[Julie Corey]

Hi Ben,

This advertisment was really great! You really did your homework for this persuasive writing piece. You could describe the meats and vegetables a little more. You could also increase sales by having sandwiches on a variety of breads. Also, don't forget that nothing is better for repeat business than coupons.

See ya' next time.

Julie

[Ben]

Dear Julie Corey,
Thankyou for responding to my all time pursuasive paragraph. Believe me it a long time to think that up. And it did turn out ok. And I also wanted to thankyou for giving me some tips to improve it. Well I have to go now!!!
P.S.: Keep respoding.
By:Ben

[Esta]

Ben,
I really enjoyed your persuasive writing. The vocabulary was excellent! The words and the pictures popped off the page. Well done. I loved that you thought of a slogan to use. The warm and cozy allusion to becoming a part of the Subway family was great. It is an important comfort zone for many people. Remember to capitalize Subway.
Keep on writing,
Esta

[Ben]

Dear Esta,
Thanks a lot for your responce, I really enjoyed it, yaa I think I think my adjectives were pretty good. The paragraph was hard to think up but I finally thought of something.
Well thanks for responding,
P.S. Keep responding.