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Amy

Wow, Jennifer! I can see that the shootings in the Washington DC area are truly on your mind. They are on my mind, too. I keep having to remind myself, especially when I walk my dog, that I live far away from that area. Then, I feel safer.

I like how you build your story to a big event or a turning point. You could probably add alot more detail to help the reader visualize your morning routine and the events leading up to this one horrible event. Or, you could write something that's not quite so upsetting! Either way, I look forward to reading your next post.

Amy

Jennifer

Hi Amy! How are you today? Well I am doing fine. I just wanted to thank you for your respond. I am going to write more stories on the web. The story that I'm going to post on the web is called
"Little Tom Goes to the ZOO". Mrs.Davis is also going to scan my illistration with the story. I'll hear from you soon!


Sincerely,
Jennifer

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